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On the wrong side of the road,
A girl waits,
She waits for a boy, gone forever,
She waits for a feeling, long forgotten.

Silent tears fall down her porcelain cheeks
Leaving streaks of black on perfect white.
The scars from too many lonely nights
Cover her arms, her legs, her neck.
Her body is littered with bruises;
Boyfriends who hurt her,
Parents who didn’t love her.

A cry escapes her lips,
A look of sadness fills her eyes,

She stares through the fog,
Looking to the other side,
Hoping to find a friendly face,
The face of someone she knows.
But there is only hostility,
For the girl on the wrong side of the road.

Old women sigh as they see the poor girl,
Young men laugh and snigger at her clothes,
And girls, those that should be her friends,
Stumble past, not daring to look.

…But still, on the wrong side of the road,
A girl waits,
She waits for a boy, gone forever,
She waits for a feeling, long forgotten.
©2005-2009 ~unnoticeable
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Yay, for the first time in ages I've actually got something to submit, it's not very good, but at least it's something right?

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:icondruknirishboy:
I think its great. It has a very lyrical feel to it. Great writing :+fav:

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"Only when the last tree has died and the last river has been poisoned and the last fish has been caught will we realize that we can't eat money."


"I'm carrying the fire."
:iconunnoticeable:
Wow thankyou. ANd thanks heaps for the fav :D :D xx

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:blackrose: ave, nos morituri te salutamus :blackrose:
please go to my gallery, [link]
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:icontigereyes04:
I loved this in every way, I could actually relate to those feelings.
Very well done :D

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Also known as Lady Wren (My drawings are still signed RN, though XD)

Write not for the audience, but for yourself. Why? Because nothing is worse than writing a book you will never be proud of.
:iconunnoticeable:
Thankyou so much, and thanks for the fav :D xx

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:blackrose: ave, nos morituri te salutamus :blackrose:
please go to my gallery, [link]
[link] Go on, click on it, you know you want to....
:icontigereyes04:
np :D

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Also known as Lady Wren (My drawings are still signed RN, though XD)

Write not for the audience, but for yourself. Why? Because nothing is worse than writing a book you will never be proud of.
:icondruknirishboy:
np great work :D

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"Only when the last tree has died and the last river has been poisoned and the last fish has been caught will we realize that we can't eat money."


"I'm carrying the fire."
:iconmysticdarkness:
thats good i dont know why u think its not its better than what ive been coming up with hence the no submissions from me in like 2 months so keep at it

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what do you do when the only thing that keeps you breathing is the one thing that takes your breathe away
:iconrawneus:
very well written.. i especially like "the girl on the wrong side of the road" ..sums it up very delicately.. i knew far too many girls such as her when i was 16 or so, one had a cut too many.. another a pill too few.. but very few got their cries for help answered. depression's beat, heh.
:iconunnoticeable:
Thanks. And believe me I know what you're going through, this is the first piece I've written in ages :D

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:blackrose: ave, nos morituri te salutamus :blackrose:
please go to my gallery, [link]
[link] Go on, click on it, you know you want to....

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