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Dust in the Wind by ~unnoticeable:iconunnoticeable:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open


I like to think you’re out there,
Watching over me,
Protecting me.

But I know in my heart,
That you’re forever gone,
Carried away by dust in the wind.

I like to think you’ll always be here,
Sheltering me from the cold,
Making sure I’m always warm.

But I in my head I know
That life will always be bitter without you
I'm trembling, lost in the snow.

I like to think you’re always in the next room,
Listening should anything go wrong,
In case I’m at all scared.

But within my body I know
That if something were to happen,
I’d be by myself. Cold and alone.

So as the wind carries your body away,
I say farewell to a man I love,
A man I will remember forever.
©2005-2009 ~unnoticeable
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:icondruknirishboy:
*DruknIrishBoy Jun 11, 2005, 12:23:13 AM
aww thats so sad :(

but it is great writing as usual.

But within my body I know
That if something does go wrong,
I’ll be by myself. Cold and alone.

Great Stanza!!

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"I'm carrying the fire."
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~unnoticeable Jun 11, 2005, 12:49:19 AM
Thankyou. It's one that I wrote quite a while ago actually, I was just looking through my journal and I found it. And yeah it is quite sad.. oh well, sadness always makes for better poetry :P Again thanks, really, I appreciate it :d xx

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`coolmarvin Jun 11, 2005, 1:00:23 AM
It's really good :D

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:icondruknirishboy:
*DruknIrishBoy Jun 11, 2005, 1:04:49 AM
Your very welcome, great poem as are they all

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"Only when the last tree has died and the last river has been poisoned and the last fish has been caught will we realize that we can't eat money."


"I'm carrying the fire."
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~unnoticeable Jun 11, 2005, 3:34:18 PM
Thanks :D and thanks for the fave xx

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~Aircraftkiller Jun 23, 2005, 10:15:13 PM
Exquisite. Too bad nobody wants to notice your work. Check my signature, maybe you can make a difference...

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~unnoticeable Jun 24, 2005, 1:35:58 AM
Thankyou very much. And thanks for the fave :D xx

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~gemstones Jun 30, 2005, 10:37:55 AM
Very sad :(

You've got a couple of redundancy's here.

Sheltering me from the cold... /That I’ll always be cold without you,
Though the emotion is right on, to say cold twice just doesnt sound right.

Listening in case anything goes wrong... /That if something does go wrong
Same problem.

Other than that, nothing that I see, very well written!

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